Hey Katie, looks pretty good for starting out. The tilt is a bit heavy to the right but easily corrected. The biggest thing this needs is what James pointed out. The camera does not see like the human eye. If what you want to present is your experience, post processing will need to be done to bring out the magic of what you saw. I too would be willing to play with the shot in Post and see what you think of the results. That is if your willing to let the file loose to one or both of us.

Nice work. Look forward to seeing more.

Roman